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PostSubject: Midnight Rondache   Tue Aug 05, 2014 10:58 pm

Midnight Rondache

Gender: Female
Species: Unicorn

Mane: Purple and green

Tail: same as mane

Eyes: one green, one magenta

Body: light black, or gray perhaps, and a normal build,

Cutie Mark: A bubble like  purple pinkish force field

Age (Baby,adult): Adult

Personality: She's not the type that goes around and looks for new friends, She tends to keep to her self a lot, but if approached by another who wants to be friends, depending on her mood she'll either give them a chance or she will simply say no and walk away, if approached again after saying no she most likely will say maybe later, so then she get along with her day, and will probably seek them out later. For those who are her friends she will be protective of them, but won't ever resort to violence unless is attacked first, or if her friends are being attacked she will  use her magic to put a bubble like force shield around them and try to chase off their attacker.

Likes: Reading, machinery, agricultural, alchemy, pychology, and work involving any of these things. Buffalo sause, and pickles.

Dislikes: Using magic for everyday things that could easily be done with hooves, being treated like royalty, friends or innocent ponies being in danger,

History:
  Born in a peaceful land full of technology across the seas west of Equestria, she wasn't happy there, so when she was old enough. She arrived in Equestria, in the town of Vanhoover with nothing, no money, friends, or a cutie mark, she was a young adult with no cutie mark. She had tried everything back home to get a cutie mark, but nothing she tried was her special talent, she hoped that in the land that she would come to call her new home, she would finally get her mark.

A few days after her arrival in Equestria, she was wandering around Vanhoover, looking for a job to help get her new life started, but couldn't find any that would hire her. She was about to go back where she was staying for the night when she heard a pair of child like screams coming from a ally. Worried about who ever was screaming, she ran down the ally and found two kids at a dead end, with a tall male adult pegasus blocking their way out, in his hoof was a knife, it was dark out but the light of the moon shined off the knife making it easier to see that he had one. Scared for the children, Midnight tried to summon her magic to help the children, she was able to put a small force field around them, then proceeded to confront the pegasus about what he was doing. The pegasus panicked and turned around and attempted to attack Midnight with the knife. She was able to avoid it by jumping back, then got an idea, she used her magic to create another force field, but this time around the pegasus. Her plan worked, he was unable to get out of it, so Midnight, sure that he wasn't able to get out, removed the force field from around the children and motioned for them to get out. Once they were out of the ally she sighed in relief, then felt like she would collapse, she wasn't used to using her magic this much. Quickly running out of the allly, she went to find some athorities who could help her take care of the pegasus, asking everypony she could find about the type of pony she was looking for, all pointed her in the direction the police station. Once there she found a police pony and explained what just happened and showed them to the alley, but the foce field was gone, and so was the Pegasus.

 After telling the police about what he looked like, and about the children, Midnight was finally able to go to the place she was staying for the night, luckily the pony living there was still up so she didn't have to worry about being quiet. She walked in and found the pony making a midnight snack, not really caring she walked past to go to the room she was gonna sleep in, but the pony said something that stopped her in her tracks.  Midnight turned around and asked him to repeat himself, and he did, he said " I see you got your cutie mark, crongrats", she then looked confused, thinking she must not of heard him right, but checking to make sure, she looking at her flank, and there it was, a pinkish purple thing that looked like half a bubble. Then she realized that it was a force field, like she had been making to protect the children.

No wonder she couldn't get her cutie mark back in her home land, it was way too peaceful and most ponies kept to themselves unless they were royalty, but even then royalty most often only talked with other royalty, mostly just for arranged marraiges. There was no reason to steal, everything was free, so no danger of being robbed.

A few weeks later Midnight had a job and had gotton enough money to get out of the town and see another. Midnight bought a ticket and got on a train and way on her way to a town called Ponyville, where she got another job and a new house to live in.

Example RP segment: 1

 It was a normal day, sun shining, birds flying, all seemed right with the world as Midnight walked through town, until she heard a sound, a sound of unhappiness, crying. She stopped walking and looked around for the source of the crying. Off to the side of the street was a foal, crying. Worried about them Midnight made her way over to the foal.

 "Hey there, what's wrong?" She asked the foal, hoping that she would be able to help the foal somehow.

 "I-I lost m-my ma-ma, can you help me find h-her?" the foal asked, still sobbing. Midnight smiled, "Of course I'll help you find her. Now follow me, shes bound to be around here somewhere, probably worried sick about you." she told the foal as they walked off to find the mother.

[Acceptance]


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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Tue Aug 05, 2014 11:33 pm

Hey there, Potato!

There's quite a few grammatical and formatting errors scattered throughout your app, but it's not enough to keep you from approval. Please do consider going back and fixing these, but, all and all, your application is Approved.

We recommend starting out in the Newbie area, but if you're comfortable with roleplaying, then feel free to start/join a topic anywhere on the site. If you have any questions, you can find us in the chat or you can PM myself or another moderator/administrator. Hope you enjoy your time here!


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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Wed Aug 06, 2014 5:28 am

WAIT A MINUTE.

I'm so sorry I missed this, but I'm going to have to revoke approval until a teensy bit is changed. Your character can't be a royal. That whole first sentence completely slipped my mind, but almost everything in it needs to be changed.

Rule citation:
4. OCs will not be approved if their role in Equestrian society is exaggerated beyond reason. Ponies may not have royal statuses, special elements, or other attributes that center society around the single character.

Also, we'd prefer if your pony was from somewhere in Equestria, but if she is from a recognised place like Saddle Arabia, Zafrica, Neighpon, etc, then that's also okay. Please change your application accordingly.

I'm so sorry about my mistake, but until this is fixed, your character will remain unapproved.

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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Wed Aug 13, 2014 2:24 pm

Potato wrote:
Born in a peaceful land full of technology across the seas west of Equestria, to a royal family, which she cares not for, luckily for her, she was not next in line for the throne.

This is still an issue. Please change according to the guidelines made in the post above to be considered for approval. Thank you!
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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Wed Aug 13, 2014 3:52 pm

Ok I have changed it again.
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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Wed Aug 13, 2014 4:19 pm

Potato wrote:
No wonder she couldn't get her cutie mark back in her home land, it was way too peaceful and most ponies kept to themselves unless they were royalty, but even then royalty most often only talked with other royalty, mostly just for arranged marraiges.

Sorry!
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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Wed Aug 13, 2014 5:48 pm

that sentence doesn't say that she is royalty, it explains how royalty socializes with others in her homeland
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PostSubject: Re: Midnight Rondache   Wed Aug 13, 2014 6:03 pm

I'm not really comfortable with leaving it there, but it's not that important.

Approved.
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