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Aqua Mareine
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PostSubject: First OC.   Fri Jan 24, 2014 6:39 pm

Aqua Mareine
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Gender: Female
Species: Pegasus

Mane: Medium length and slightly wavy. Light aquamarine with a few small streaks of medium purple.

Tail: Long and slightly wavy. Light aquamarine with two thinner streaks of medium purple.

Eyes:Light Aquamarine

Body: Pale lavender, slightly taller than your average pony.

Cutie Mark: A dark purple quill in the process of drawing a  pink heart. Heart is three quarters completed.

Age (Baby,adult): Young adult.


Personality: Quiet to strangers, eccentric, strange, friendly, spacey.

Likes: The ocean, collecting unusual objects, daydreaming, writing, adventure/romance novels, being carefree.

Dislikes: Bullying. Having to be in a hurry. Creatures who are judgmental. Feeling like she doesn't belong.

History: Aqua was born in Cloudsdale, but at a very young age Aqua and her parents moved to Baltimare to get away from the competitive spirit of the bustling city. Her parents were both artists and preferred a more relaxed atmosphere to feed their creativity. She was the happiest pony in the world until one day her parents decided to go on a romantic sailing trip from which that didn't return. Aqua spent a lot of her time at HorseShoe Bay, staring out to sea and writing romantic love stories about her parents and their imagined adventures. That's how she discovered her talent lies in writing romantic novels. After finishing her first story, her cutie mark appeared, a quill drawing a heart. She has finally come to the conclusion her parents are not coming home, and has decided to move to a new town to start her own life.

Example RP segment:  (It is pouring rain outside. Your OC spots the light of a tavern up ahead. The tavern is filled with ponies that your OC doesn't know. Given your OC’s personality, compose a brief narrative in which your OC identifies and addresses the situation.)

Aqua Mareine slowly trudges down the dirt road, she has been traveling for days and her legs are so tired. She looks up at the sky, contemplating flying, so she can give her hooves a break. Just then a bright lighting bolt strikes a treetop nearby. Her head sags back towards the ground and she thinks to herself, "Maybe it wasn't such a good idea to move, maybe my parents will come home soon after all, and I won't be there to meet them." She crys, as she slowly begins walking again. She just feels so alone in the world. Then she spots a light in the distance, relieved, she gets a burst of energy that allows her to run towards it. She halts at the steps to a large tavern, she can see through a window that it's filled with ponies laughing and enjoying each other's company. Aqua slowly climbs the steps and hesitates at the door.."What if the other ponies don't want me in there? What if they all stare and laugh at me?" she asks herself. Aqua looks back towards the rainy, dark road she just came from. She takes a deep breath, smiles and opens the tavern door.

[Acceptance]

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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Fri Jan 24, 2014 7:47 pm

Hello there! Just to let you know, you were not logged in when you posted this. I would recommend logging in :)

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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Fri Jan 24, 2014 7:56 pm

Oops! Sorry about that. Do I need to repost this now that I've logged in?
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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Fri Jan 24, 2014 9:12 pm

nope, just knowing it belongs to you is good ^.^

I'll read this over in detail and get back to you soon, as I don't have the time to right now. sorry! I'll try and be quick :)

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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Sun Jan 26, 2014 1:15 am

Ok! Finally got about to reading it.

A couple things I want to touch on. one is something that I'd like changed and the other is mainly a tip.

First off, the personality section was meant to be one of the sections to go into detail on. For example, on the app for my character "Blind Side":

Quote :
Blind Side is a tough mare who won't stand for ponies who play games with her. She's kind, and usually warm-hearted. She's always had a soft spot for those in need, never taking it well if she couldn't help at least a little. She's embraced her disability, and, in fact, loves educating ponies about it. Although, she does get embarrassed when she gets lost and has to play the "poor blind mare" act.

the way you have it gets the point across, but it's simply a format change ^.^

The other thing is mainly a tip. Try to break up RPs and such into paragraphs. a wall of text can be a bit daunting.

If you have any questions, feel free to PM me, another admin, or any member staff. everyone here is really nice and loves to help ^.^

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~:Blind Side:~
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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Sun Jan 26, 2014 3:31 am

I couldn't find the edit button, sorry.:(
I hope this is good enough.:) Also, is that what you meant by breaking up the rp?

Gender: Female
Species: Pegasus

Mane: Medium length and slightly wavy. Light aquamarine with a few small streaks of medium purple.

Tail: Long and slightly wavy. Light aquamarine with two thinner streaks of medium purple.

Eyes:Light Aquamarine

Body: Pale lavender, slightly taller than your average pony.

Cutie Mark: A dark purple quill in the process of drawing a  pink heart. Heart is three quarters completed.

Age (Baby,adult): Young adult.


Personality: Aqua Mareine is a very kind and soft spoken pony. She's is very dreamy, and a bit eccentric due to her limited socialization with other ponies. She loves books and cloud watching, and simply cannot understand ponies who move at a faster pace. Aqua is the kind of pony to stop and smell the roses, and then spend the next two hours talking about how wonderful the roses were.

Likes: The ocean, collecting unusual objects, daydreaming, writing, adventure/romance novels, being carefree.

Dislikes: Bullying. Having to be in a hurry. Creatures who are judgmental. Feeling like she doesn't belong.

History: Aqua was born in Cloudsdale, but at a very young age Aqua and her parents moved to Baltimare to get away from the competitive spirit of the bustling city. Her parents were both artists and preferred a more relaxed atmosphere to feed their creativity.
They all lived happily in a cottage by the sea, with few visitors, but they were content with each other's company. Aqua thought she was probably the happiest pony in the world, until one day her parents decided to go on a romantic sailing trip from which they didn't return.
Aqua didn't really know anyone else, and her other family was estranged from her, because of her parents unconventional lifestyle. So Aqua spent the next couple of years alone, a lot of her time spent at HorseShoe Bay, staring out to sea and writing romantic love stories about her parents and their imagined adventures.
One day, after finishing her first true romantic novel, her cutie mark appeared. A quill drawing a heart. She has finally come to the conclusion her parents are not coming home, and has decided she cannot be alone any longer, and she needs to find a new town in which to start her own life.

Example RP segment:  (It is pouring rain outside. Your OC spots the light of a tavern up ahead. The tavern is filled with ponies that your OC doesn't know. Given your OC’s personality, compose a brief narrative in which your OC identifies and addresses the situation.)

Aqua Mareine slowly trudges down the dirt road, she has been traveling for days and her legs are so tired.

She looks up at the sky, contemplating flying, so she can give her hooves a break. Just then a bright lighting bolt strikes a treetop nearby.

Her head sags back towards the ground and she thinks to herself, "Maybe it wasn't such a good idea to move, maybe my parents will come home soon after all, and I won't be there to meet them."

She begins to cry, as she slowly starts walking again. She just feels so alone in the world.

Then she spots a light in the distance, relieved, she gets a burst of energy that allows her to run towards it.

She halts at the steps to a large tavern, she can see through a window that it's filled with ponies laughing and enjoying each other's company.

Aqua slowly climbs the steps and hesitates at the door.."What if the other ponies don't want me in there? What if they all stare and laugh at me?" she asks herself.  

Aqua looks back towards the rainy, dark road she just came from. She takes a deep breath, smiles and opens the tavern door.

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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Sun Jan 26, 2014 3:36 am

taken to an extreme, but yes haha :)

it looks good to me.

Approved!

You may begin Roleplaying at your discretion ^.^ Have fun!

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~:Erigo:~
~:Lunar Star:~
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PostSubject: Re: First OC.   Sun Jan 26, 2014 3:48 am

Thanks a bunch! ^^
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