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Leelee



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Join date : 2013-12-20
Age : 21

PostSubject: Xero   Fri Dec 20, 2013 9:15 pm

Leelee
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Gender: Female

Species: Pegasus

Mane: blue, short messy mane

Tail:standard long blue tail

Eyes: One red eye, other is orange

Body: Dark blue(looks black without lighting)

Cutie Mark: Power button with a paint brush in between it

Age (Baby,adult): Adult

Personality: Xero is a very outgoing pony, always making sure to make atleast one friend in a new situation. Xero is usually afraid of not doing what she dreams, causing her love for being praised and loved. Being a gamer she spends most of her time inside with her olden arcade games, the only time she leaves the house is to go out to her gallery to paint, or spread her wings!.

Likes: Sushi,japanese culture, Art, Flying, and contest.:)

Dislikes: Obnoxious Ponies,waking up early, Syrup, Lectures, failing something she dreams of, Gardening :D.

History: Xero was abandoned when she was 4 years old, her family was tired of all the trouble she caused and could no longer stand the embarrassment. After traveling alone for 5 days with only a paintbrush in her sack, she found pony ville, with her eyes shining and staring at each house in awe, she ran into a stallion, the stallion smiled asking her if her parents were around, no one had ever seen a lone foal travel by themselves. Xero shook her head, telling him what had happened, the stallion frowned, he leaned down to the little foal and smiled"Well, i am Xion, i can take you in,until you get old enough to live on your own" he smiled, and with that he took her in, until the day she found her cutie mark and put her dream forward, getting a job and getting bits.

Example RP segment: (Refer to post below)

Xero stared across from her, her eyes blinked not believing what he just spoke to her, it was so wrong, she didnt even know where these secret admirer letters and gfts came from, and yet here he stood. Xero giggled nervously, she bowed her head down, her wings spread" I honestly had no idea you liked me...and you've been so close! why be so secretive! i'm standing right next to you almost every day!" she spoke, her eyes looking up at the sky for the right words before returning to the stallion pegasus who stood infront of her.

(2. A secret admirer confesses his/her love to your OC. Given your OC’s personality, compose a brief narrative in which your OC identifies and addresses the situation.)

[Acceptance]


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Doodle Bug



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PostSubject: Re: Xero   Fri Dec 20, 2013 11:26 pm

Hello Leelee and welcome to the forum! I like your oc so far but there's a few things that I can't allow like playing video games and computers since the only video game in the show is on those old arcade machines. The technology in Equestria is simple so we'd like to keep it the same. ^.^ Also, could you space out the separate paragraphs so it isn't difficult to read all bunched up together like that.
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Leelee



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PostSubject: Re: Xero   Fri Dec 20, 2013 11:35 pm

Alrighty ^_^ fixed it. c:
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PostSubject: Re: Xero   Sat Dec 21, 2013 1:24 am

"Sushi,japanese culture" Since we are trying to stay true to the show, Equestria doesn't have Japan or sushi.

And this part: " he smiled, and with that he took her in, until the day she found her cutie mark and put her dream forward, getting a job and getting bits." Please take out the multiple ands and put in a period so it won't seem like a run-on.

Also, having the power button on her cutiemark along with the paintbrush would mean she would have to have a profession in game testing as well since, as I remember, they didn't care enough about the art back then and only used pixels.

Plus a power button is still too new age so how about a joystick?
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