Snow Rose

Name: Snow Rose



Gender: Mare
Species: Unicorn
Mane: Sky Blue, curly
Tail: Sky Blue, curly
Eyes: Deep Blue
Body: White
Cutie Mark: White Rose with 3 green leaves
Age: Adult
Personality: Snow Rose is a sweet young mare with a vicious anger. Most ponies are gentle around her, to avoid her temper, except those who love to watch her explode (metaphorically). As a unicorn, Snow's talent resides with plants. She loves to explore the Everfree Forest, and tends to go there in her free time.
Likes: Candy, Winter, Night, Flowers
Dislikes: Vegetables, Summer, Day, Loud Noises
History: Snow Rose had always been a quiet filly. She didn't leave her home in Canterlot unless she was going to school. Snow hated loud noises, and didn't play with the other fillies and colts. Except for her only friend, Sunstone, who preferred the quiet as well. She grew older, and sad, for she was the last one in her class to receive her cutie mark. One day, she was tending to her family's garden, when she noticed their dying rose. It was a rare albino rose, the color of her coat. Snow constantly tended to it, and it became stronger every day. The day it bloomed was the day she got her cutie mark. A white rose.

Snow Rose moved away from Canterlot the moment her parents let her go. She didn't like the continuous bustle of the fancy ponies, and longed for the quietness of a small town, such as Ponyville. Within moving, Snow became very shy, but she snapped at any insult. Many ponies avoided her and her temper, and she grew sad and lonely. Snow moved to the outskirts of town, and shunned a happy life.

Example RP segment:2. A secret admirer confesses his/her love to your OC. Given your OC’s personality, compose a brief narrative in which your OC identifies and addresses the situation.

Snow was walking into town to gather some supplies she had been needing. Trying to go unnoticed, she tripped over a branch. Suddenly, a young stallion was helping her up. She lost her balance and fell against him. Their muzzles were inches from each other. The gray stallion smiled sweetly, and bent toward her ear.
"I love you," he whispered. Snow gaped.  How can anypony love me? she thought. I'm nopony special. Nopony likes me. But there he was, the nameless stallion, staring lovingly into her deep blue eyes. Then with sudden recognition, she gasped.
"Sunstone? Is that you?" His mouth toyed with a playful grin.
"So, in all of your shyness, you still remember your best friend." He nuzzled her. "I missed you, Snow. Why'd you leave?" She frowned.
"You know why, Sunny. I couldn't stand the noise."
"Is that a reason to leave me behind? Did you not know I would come after you? Snow, are you that stupid?" She couldn't take his blame game anymore.
"Don't you dare call me stupid!" She muttered darkly. Snow Rose knew she has to calm down before she threw the first blow, so she turned and galloped back to get home in the forest. Supplies could wait.

Acceptance

There's a few parts of this app that need editing.

Most importantly is that we don't allow ponies to live in the Everfree Forest, so you will need to change that.

I would also add some more detail to your OC's history section, such as her childhood and how she earned her cutie mark.

Lastly, try to use paragraphing in your roleplaying segment, especially concerning speech.

Thank you! I will work on that! Do I just post a new app? Our is there a way to edit?

If you click the "edit post" button at the top of the first post, it will let you edit :)

All done! I await your reply...

Changes made.

Your character has been approved.