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ERROR57noname



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PostSubject: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 12:41 am

Starlight

Gender: Female
Species: Unicorn
Mane: Braided, black
Tail: Flowing, also black
Eyes: Completely black
Body: Very thin
Cutie Mark: None
Age (Baby,adult): Young Teenager
Personality: Very cheerful and usually a bit hyper in the morning. She always seems to decline food and drink, for some reason, and is always happiest on a clear starry night. The only time she seemed to take any kind of food was during a three-day downpour, when she asked for hot chocolate. She is not particularly social, but really enjoys the company of those she knows well.
Likes: Travelling, runes, solitude, moonlight, clear skies, starry nights
Dislikes: crowds, loud noises (she jumps at them), sunlight, streetlamps, bad weather
History: Born in Manehattan, her parents worked high-profile jobs, barely ever seeing her. She was often left to her own devices. She taught herself many things, including astronomy, a small amount of magic, and, most importantly, a spell which allows her to feed off starlight, essentially eliminating the need to sleep or eat. However, she must be outside to do this, and it must be a clear sky with little light pollution. This essentially means that Manehattan has few places in which she can use this. Sadly, her parents, who were quite elderly, eventually died of old age. At their passing, Starlight saw a green-clad stallion watching her from the crypt (She was the only one at the funeral). She went over to him, and asked him who he was. His name was Swift Reaper (He's my other OC), and he seemed pretty lonely. Without anywhere to go, considering her parents' house was sold, she moved in with him at his request. She slowly started falling in love with him, after a few months there. They went on outings, they talked, and they gave each-other nice gifts during the holidays. Now, she always stays by his side.

Example RP segment: On a bright and sunny mid-afternoon, Starlight groaned and sat down on a park bench, completely exhausted. "These long days aren't exactly making it easy for my to stay awake..." She muttered to herself. It was then that her friend, Swift came up to her and sat down next to her. "Hi," he said, seemingly uncomfortable. "Spit it out, what do you want?" She said tiredly.

"Well," said Swift, rubbing the back of his head, "I, uh... How do I put this... I-actually-love-you-and-I-want-to-know-if-you-love-me-back!!!" He said quickly, and then looked away."

Starlight was rather shocked. Was this actually happening? She had always thought her feelings for this stallion were silly, but no. They were real. "Of course! Why do you think I decided to stay with you?" She laughed happily, her day brightened. They walked back to the crypt together, both of them rather exuberant.

Acceptance


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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 12:59 am

The rp segment, likes and dislikes, personality need to be longer and your pony can't be 1145 years old and it also can't be a spirit or can't have any kind of supernatural anything like ghosts or any kind of trait that would draw attention to them and them alone. constantly changing her name would be awfully confusing.

3. OCs will not be approved if their characterization does not follow a rational scheme. Ponies do not have special abilities extending beyond racial attributes. Ponies are only as stylistically modern as the Equestrian setting permits. Ordinary ponies do not live in or originate from the Everfree forest. For a list of regions and their corresponding themes, refer to |this topic|.
4. OCs will not be approved if their role in Equestrian society is exaggerated beyond reason. Ponies may not have royal statuses, special elements, or other attributes that center society around the single character.
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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 1:06 am

Overhaul has been made
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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 1:16 am

You still didn't expand on the likes and dislikes, and also your personality needs to be at least a paragraph long. And the never aging thing is still breaking the rules.
Ponies may not have royal statuses, special elements, or other attributes that center society around the single character. Also the Rp segment still needs to be longer.
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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 3:34 am

Edited and changed name.
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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 6:11 pm

"She was often left to her own devices. She taught herself many things, including astronomy, a small amount of magic, and, most importantly, a spell which allows her to feed off starlight through a set of cuffs, essentially eliminating the need to sleep or eat. However, she must be outside to do this, and it must be a clear sky with little light pollution."

I talked with the other mods and admins and I'm sorry, but having magical items isn't allowed especially with the ability to absorb starlight. Although she can wear them as a fashion statement.
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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 6:14 pm

Got rid of the whole part about magic items, it's just a spell she casts now
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PostSubject: Re: Starlight   Fri Aug 23, 2013 6:20 pm

Also, Your rp segment doesn't follow the love rp segment where the stallion actually comes up and talks to her.

Change this and you'll be approvable

All changes made, APPROVED
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