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Dark The Pegasus

Dark The Pegasus

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PostSubject: Dusk The Unicorn    Dusk The Unicorn  I_icon_minitimeMon Aug 12, 2013 6:11 am

Dusk The Unicorn  23roa6s

Gender: female

Species: unicorn

Mane: a mix of wavy and ..spikey. it goes over the left side of her head and hangs down.

Tail: her tail has only one spike and a large curve at the end. apart from that, its not to different from her mane.

Eyes: a nice red.

Body: just a normal pony body, but she has a horn. And she is purple.

Cutie Mark: Dusk The Unicorn  143ng9i

Special Talent: Giving other ponies Nightmares.

Age: 20.

Personality: Dusk is a quiet but...slightly mean pony who loves to do one thing: Prank. She spends a lot of her time pulling pranks on other ponies. But of course she has a few friends. She wont prank them. But she still finds it fun to give her friends little scares. But out of all, She loves causing a Havoc with her little Nightmare spell..

Likes: Giving other ponies nightmares, Pranking, Her friends,

Dislikes: staying indoors, animals, Transport.

History: Dusk Has always been a Pranker pony. When she was a filly, she was hanging out with her friends when she heard Some Colt sitting by a coatrack. Dusk was feeling a little silly, So she left her friends to quickly find a rock and a straw. A few moments later she was hiding behind a wall. She turned to look at the colt, then fired the rock through the straw. The rock hit the Colt. He jumped in surprise and turned around. there was nopony there. The colt Groaned and trotted off. Surprisingly to Dusk, This became quite fun. Dusk giggled and walked off, once again leaving her friends sitting there laughing. Eventually the colt came back and yelled at Dusk's friends. Dusk heard this and kind of wanted to stand up for them, But also felt kind of happy. She was safe from trouble, But she still felt slightly bad.

The next day, Dusk Strolled over to her absolute best friends house, who was not there the day Dusk was pranking the colt. Dusk knocked on the door, Then hid in the bushes. Dusk's friend, Ruby Rose, Opened the door and looked around. Suddenly Dusk jumped out of the bushes. Ruby Jumped then giggled. Dusk went inside with Ruby and explained about how she had been focusing on a magic trick that was meant to change your skin color. Ruby offered to be the test subject. So Dusk tried the magic trick on Ruby, But nothing happened. So Dusk went home and gave up practising. She was kind of sad about it now, and didn't want to practice. eventually Dusk went to bed, and so did Ruby. The next day Ruby called Dusk, Complaining that she had Huge nightmares and she believed that magic trick was what gave her the nightmare. Dusk Grinned over the phone. At least she knew one magic trick very very well. That was the day she got her cutie mark. Dusk apologized to Ruby.

As Dusk grew up, She became a much better pranker and She became quite good with her spells. She forgot a few, but the one she could not forget was her nightmare spell. Since she had gotten her cutie mark she had been giving nightmares to ponies she did not like. She enjoyed seeing her enemies so scared to go to sleep, But That didn't mean she was Evil. Dusk Just had a different way of seeing things.

Example RP segment: Your OC is framed by a robber who plants his weapon on him/her. A Guardpony threatens to take your OC into custody. Given your OC’s personality, compose a brief narrative in which your OC identifies and addresses the situation.

Dusk Yelps as the robber knocks Dusk down and plants his weapon On her chest. Dusk looks at the guardpony then back to the robber. Dusk growled deeply as her horn glowed a bright green. She put the nightmare spell On the two. then Dusk Used her magic to make herself look quite different to the robber and guardpony. Now she looked evil and threatining. The robber and guardpony were now backing away, their legs quivering to look at Dusk. Dusk Bared her teeth, and straight away the two ran off. Dusk took the Spell off herself and smirked, Walking back to the everfree forest to continue what she was doing.

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Rosey Bubbles

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PostSubject: Re: Dusk The Unicorn    Dusk The Unicorn  I_icon_minitimeMon Aug 12, 2013 6:28 am

Hey Dark, this oc is almost ready for approval.

Besides having many capitalization errors, I had a problem with the "Special Talent" part. Not only is this not part of the creation template, but I have a big problem with giving ponies nightmares. It has not been in the canon that there is such a spell, but casting it is her only talent? Not, I don't know, pranking?

Also, the rp segment is very op. We have only heard of Changelings changing looks, not unicorns.

As it stands now, she can keep her nightmare spell. I can justify that one, as she's practiced it for practically her whole life. But the rest of her spells need to be average, to balance the character.

So, change the rp segment, and we're golden.
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