Motion Breaker(fixed)

Name: Motion Breaker
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Gender:Stallion
Species:Earth Pony
Mane:Scarlet with Light Blue
Tail:Spiky Scarlet with a Light Blue fringe
Eyes:Light Blue
Body:Purple, has a black jacket
Cutie Mark:A simple sword
Age (Baby,adult):Adult
Personality:Motion Breaker is a kind but quiet stallion, he's not someone who likes to create problems and he's a good actor and an exeprt on swords
Likes:Helping, Music, Training, Rainy days and bublegums, nature, have company, tamwork, act in public
Dislikes:Mean ponys, books, spiders, strawberries, problems, rumours, lies, selfishnes
History:Motion Breaker used to be an actor and what got him into that was the fact that he loved to see the point of view of the characters and the different times each script was writed but he quit his job when his younger sister got killed she was a little earth pony that would cheer him up every time he was depressed ,they were orphans but didn't know the reason,when he was younger his cutie mark would've been an action script but his friends convinced him to train with them using swords, soon he became an expert and realised he got his cutie mark, but that didn't stoped him from studying acting,when his sister got killed he made a promise to stop whoever killed his sister and left behind everything that he had, since then he travels from town to town searching for the one who killed his sister
Example RP segment:Motion Breaker is watching from a distance how a colt is bullying a filly in Manehattan street when Motion decides to aproach he yells to the colt: "Hey you". as the colt hears this he then turns around and snaps to Motion: "What are you looking at?".At this response Motion decides it was time to teach him a lesson, aproaching with anger in his eyes he said: "I guess your parents didn't tell you that you must not hurt a filly, I'll let you live but if I see you hurting somepony else...you'll pay now leave". With this said the colt just walked away and tried to say: "T-This is not over yet".

It's getting there, but we've run into another problem.

It says in his History that his Cute Mark "changed", but we have never seen this happen on the show, or know that it can even happen in the realm or mlp.

I'll need to discuss this concept with mods and admins before he can be approved.

Still a little bit on the short side, and you should really look out for grammar and spelling issues.

(Also, you don't have to make an entirely new application, just hit the "edit" button :D)

XDXDXD darn grammatics i wish i was better on english XDXDXD

It's fine :) I have trouble with it too, seeing that English is my second language >.< Next time, just ask somepony to proofread it for you for any spelling/grammar mistakes.

Also, I have discussed it with the Admins and Mods, and we have come to the conclusion that it has not been made canon that ponies can change cutie marks, and therefore cannot be in an app.

Sorry, but I can't approve this application until you find another reason that his cutie mark is a sword that doesn't involve "changing" it >.<

You're almost there!

ok thanks for the advice :p

It's still on the short side and has many grammar/spelling mistakes, but you made the changes i asked you to make, and therefore...

*trumpets play*

Your character is now officially approved!

Welcome to the earth pony family :)

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