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princess sky



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PostSubject: Sky's oc   Tue Jun 11, 2013 7:57 am

Fay

Gender:Colt.
Species:Pegasus.
Mane:Dark blue and light green stripes.
Tail:Dark blue an light green stripes.
Eyes:Dark red.
Body:Full on black and he is strong.
Cutie Mark:Fays cutie mark is his name shaped into a cat.

Age (Baby,adult):Colt.

Personality:Shy,tough around friends,happy and sad can easily get emotional for his acting,reading,amazing at writing story's.

likes:Acting,flying and playing with his friend,reading writing a story likes ice cream and likes Sky.

Dislikes:Tomatoes,oranges and criminals,bullies serial killers,giants and popular pony's.

History:Fay isn't a ordinary colt he was born in Manehatten, it's a scary place to live in but, his tough he has an older brother called Bleed,Bleed is younger than Fay.Fay got his cutie mark by looking at a poor cat it was sick he gave him some water and food.Fay was at the beach with the poor kitty he wrote his name together and it looked just liked the cat and that was his special talent to act like others and to help pony's in trouble.Fay isn't an orphan but he has an orphan friend called Sky,Sky and Fay are the best-est friends but Fay feels more than that,Fay is in trouble he has no food to feed his family, him and Sky go on an adventure and they go across some friends.

example rp segment:Fay was wandering around he herd a scream calling for help "HELP SOME PONY HELP".

Fay turned a corner to see a filly getting bullied and picked on "hey stop that"bravely said Fay the bully turned around "hey get lost it's none of your business and you be quiet"said the bully,

Fay took a couple of steps forward "hey stop that why don't you pick on someone your own size"said Fay strongly to the bully "yeah your right i should bully you instead"said the bully "run filly run" told Fay to the little filly,the filly did what he said and ran "hey you scared of my dinner know you have to pay for that"shouted the bully,"can't we talk about here here's some money and he's food i'm sorry i did that but it's not nice to bully someone"replied Fay the bully accepted on what he did and he never did it again

(accepted)


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Rosey Bubbles



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PostSubject: Re: Sky's oc   Tue Jun 11, 2013 8:47 am

Looks good to me, a bit on the smaller side, but good nonetheless. Try getting a mod/admin to approve it!
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PostSubject: Re: Sky's oc   Tue Jun 11, 2013 10:03 am

I think the sparkles are cool! But is he a crystal pony because normally they have sparkles. I am just curious.
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Fireseeker



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PostSubject: Re: Sky's oc   Tue Jun 11, 2013 7:22 pm

First of all, spelling, grammar and punctuation. You should include spacing and paragraphing when using speech, capital letters when needed, and full stops and comas when needed.

Secondly, you should either add more details to the physical descriptions of your OC, or add a picture fo them.

Lastly, the reason for 'sparkles' in character's hair has not been disclosed in the show. The most widely believed reason is that it is reserved for goddesses (i.e. Celestia and Luna). Therefore, I would not include it with your OC.

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PostSubject: Re: Sky's oc   Wed Jun 12, 2013 2:34 pm

Changes made. Still a few spelling mistakes here and there but nothing horrendous.

Your character has been approved.

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