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Weedo The Great



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PostSubject: Spirit Hop   Fri May 17, 2013 7:21 am

First OC Spirit Hop



YOUR NAME: Spirit Hop

Gender: Stallion
Species: Pegasus
Mane: Slate Blue
Tail: Slate Blue
Eyes: Deep pink
Body: Lime green
Cutie Mark:A bird looking at a star
Skills (felt like adding this :D ): Fast flier AND runner, a talented veterinarian, can moon walk, can drink a galleon of cider in under three minutes, can quickly recover from crashing, decent baker
Age (Baby,adult):Adult
Personality: Spirit is a very social pony. He can get along with most ponies despite not being much of a spokesman

He is very quick to forget an offence, as he sees it as a "I'm sure he/she had a reason" kind of thing

He hates to talk about why he stopped being a veterinarian as it is a very personal reason

Likes: reading, relaxing,  Nature , helping a pony in need, Most Animals, Speed , and candy but then again  who doesn't like candy?.
Dislikes: Cruelty. Greed. and Spiders. Bullies.
Job: Cloud Control.
History:He was born in Cloudsdale to a average pegasus couple who gave their son a rather good education. As He grew older he became a talented veterinarian before he those that it was not for him.

His cuttie mark appeared at a VERY young age, it seemed that no matter what he would always try to help a friend and waste no time doing so

He soon got bored of Cloudsdale and moved to Ponyville, the first time he went to get some supplies for his new home he helped reunite a filly with her mother. currently he is looking for some friends and maybe somepony to love.



Example RP segment: (Refer to Story below)

Spirit Wing jogged down the street's to get groceries when he spotted a crying foal. He approached the sad filly and lowered his head to the filly's level and in a soft but concerned voice he asked "Hey there... what's wrong?"

the foal looked up and sniffled "I-I can't find my mommy" before crying some more

"There there I will look for her, what's her name? ". He said as he gave a kind smile.

" Her name is (Insert adorable pony name)" with a gentle smile he responded "Stay here OK? I will find your mother in a heartbeat"

the foal looked up and smiled "thank you mister" he then flew to the nearest guard "Hey there! Do you know a (insert name here again) ?, Her child is lost in the street's"

The guard recovered from nearly getting run over by this Pegasus (why do pegasi always do this!?) and said "well yeah she lives right next to the (insert place) down the (insert another thingy :P)" he smiled and quickly said "thank you"

the guard smiled and said "your welcome" he then went to the home to make sure that it was the right mare "Knock knock"

A mare with tear's in her eyes opened the door "Y-yes?" she said crying a little . Spirit quickly asked "are you missing a little filly with the name (insert another adorable name here)?"

she jumped and said "Yes have you seen her?", Before Spirit said "Follow me I know where she is"

She did not waste any time and went after him it only took a few minute's before they found the filly

"Mommy!" The filly exclaimed as she ran up to her mother. "Sweetie!" her mother cried before they gave each other a close hug.

"Thank you so much sir how can I repay you!?" before he smiled. "It was nothing really I just wanted to he- oh gotta go  im late bye!" he said before racing to the general store THE END :D



"Acceptance"


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PostSubject: Re: Spirit Hop   Fri May 17, 2013 10:44 am

Hello Weedo, welcome to the site.

Considering English is not your first language, your OC looks very good. Just try to be a little more careful with your grammar, as there are mistakes. Mainly full stops and commas being misused and capital letters being missed out.

As for your OC, try to add more to the personality and explain your character rather than just listing characteristics.

Also, it would be good if you could include a link of a large picture of your OC.

Feel free to use the chat box at the bottom of the homepage to chat to others online :)

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PostSubject: Re: Spirit Hop   Fri May 17, 2013 11:34 am

Dang you're right I will work on this some more

Anyway thanks for pointing that out :P


Update

Apparently my word program was set to moon speak! (Japanese)
Ups

VICTORY! (Got the picture up :D)
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PostSubject: Re: Spirit Hop   Fri May 17, 2013 3:15 pm

Changes have been made.

Your character has been approved. :)

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