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Mister Black



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PostSubject: Thoughtfuel´s introduction   Thu Mar 07, 2013 8:03 am

Thoughtfuel

Gender:Male

Species:Unicorn

Mane: Long and curly. Dark blonde

Tail: Same as the mane

Eyes: Deep blue

Body: A bit smaller than average. Pretty skinny

Cutie Mark: A shield

Age (Baby,adult): Adult. Human equivalent to his mid-twentys

Personality: Thoughtfuel is a very loving person. He can not stand to see ponys or any creatures at all getting harmed. He loves to make new friends but is somewhat shy and afraid of social interaction, getting nervous quickly. He moves in a constant dillema between these two attributes. He currently lives in a small house at the edge of Ponyville.
Thoughtfuel is generally very calm usually able to calm down others as well.

Likes: Thoughtfuel usually prefers to stay at home, reading novels. However he does wander Ponyville from time to time. He is filled with delight everytime he manages to help somepony with a problem. Seeing others smile is above any price for him.
Dislikes: Thoughtfuel hates violence and aggresive types of ponys. He gets irritated quickly when somepony is rude or intolerant.

History: Thoughtfuel only knows that he has been born in Canterlot and his Parents provided him with lots of money. He never got to know them personally and was raised by a maid until the age of 18. The maid was quite skilled teaching him politeness and how to handle ponies with care, however she was also distant leaving him longing for true paternal love. Over the time other events like this have contributed to him often sealing himself of from others. He earned his cutie mark after he enveloped his entire house in a shield spell for several days, without even noticing it. His cutie mark also reflects his often defensive stance in social situations. He recieved a decent education however found himself unskilled at most magic, leaving him with basic telecinesis but a proffesional knowledge of shields. He makes money implimenting shield mechanics in devices to upkeep their durability. Although he knows his limits he is quite happy with his work. Loving to contribute to the progress of civilization. There are few ponies who are actually friends with him considering that he tends to have longer sessions of soltitude in which he builds a shield around his house, refusing to let anyone in.

Example RP segment: Thoughtfuel walked trough Ponyville, admiring the happy atmosphere, when suddenly he heard a whine, like from a litte child. Looking around he spotted a filly, standing in the middle of the street crying her eyes out. The passing ponys looked at her but nopony seemed to want to step in.

He decided to approach her positioning himself beside her, facing in the same direction beginning to speak to her slowly

"Hello there. Can I help you?" The filly didn´t respond and instead continued to cry. Thoughtfuel continued to stand there, his presence known to her, waiting, until she could talk again. After a while she settled down enough so she could speak.

"I-I-*sob*I´ve lost my mommy!" Thoughtfuel frowned now dear, where did you lose her?" "I don´t know! I was just going home with my mommy and now I can´t find her anymore!" She started to break in sobs again and Thoughtfuel carefully layed a hoof around her until she calmed down again.

Suddenly he heard a mare calling out* "Hoovy? Hoovy where are you?" Thoughtfuel smiled as he heared the voice. "Do you hear that? I think your mother is calling you." The little filly raised her head, noticing the voice and bolting off towards the mare.
Thoughtfuel smiled happily trotting away from the two of them, humming a little melody.

[ACCEPTANCE]


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PostSubject: Re: Thoughtfuel´s introduction   Thu Mar 07, 2013 11:37 am

Your character app is looking fairly good. There's only a couple of areas that need tweaking.

- Add a little more to his history. For a pony in his mid twenties, Thoughtfuel should have a more detialed history than what he currently has. Perhaps add some information about how he coped with his lonely childhood, how exactly he got his cutie mark, and how he ended up where is is today.

- Your style of roleplaying is a little unusual and not what we see often here on the site. Try not to use asterisks (*) and use more spacing/paragraphing. Have a look at this thread for some example roleplaying:
http://mlp-fim-oc-rp.forumotion.net/t1457-friendly-encounters

Also, I assume that his name is supposed to be spelt Thoughtfuel, and not Thoughtful.

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PostSubject: Re: Thoughtfuel´s introduction   Thu Mar 07, 2013 1:53 pm

I have added a bit more of history and changed the RP format. Let me know if there is something else that needs explaining/changing.
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PostSubject: Re: Thoughtfuel´s introduction   Thu Mar 07, 2013 6:44 pm

Changes and additions made.

Your character has been approved. :)

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