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Emeraldain



Posts : 25
Join date : 2012-11-13
Age : 18
Location : Ponyville

PostSubject: Emeraldain    Tue Nov 13, 2012 4:38 pm



Name: Emeraldain
Gender: Male
Species: Pegasus
Mane: Shades of Green
Tail: Shades of Green, Long, Soft
Eyes: Emerald Green
Body: Sleek, Athletic, Lean, Above average height
Coat: A Bright sunshiny yellow
Cutie Mark: Cut Emerald with an angelic wing sprouting from either side
Age (Baby,adult): Young Adult

Personality: Out going, Loyal, Kind, Energetic, Stands up for others, Can be struck by bouts of Doubt, Anxiety, and a Lack of Self Confidence(usually when alone)

Likes:Being with Friends, Cooking, Eating, Flying, Walking, Dancing, Reading, Gaming(Video and otherwise) Star Gazing, Singing and History
Dislikes:Bullies, (usually)Being alone, Sleeping, Boasting, Snobs, Pompous Ponies

History: Emeraldain has been a wanderer all his life, walking, or flying, from town to town in look for the perfect home for him, and assisting everypony. Instilled for the travelers' life after watching the Wonder Bolts as a young foal, and by the actions of his late sister Guardpony Nightingale, his life goal is to make Equestria a generally better place, doing whatever he can to aid those he meets.
   
     He earned his cutie mark after he revealed an unknown talent for flight during his hometown's , Quarrinast a small time mining town at the foot of a mountain west of Canterlot, annual festival known as the Gem Festival, where many challenges, feasts, games, parties and other events in homage to the priceless gems that kept their town on the map. It was here at the age of 13 during the Great Gem Dig, an event where ponies from all over town gathered together to "break" in the town's newest quarries where ponies were encouraged to dig, mine, and chip away at the jewels covering the quarry's vast walls and tunnels, where the top 5 collectors were allowed to keep the jewels they found or sell them.*The higher your placement the higher the payout per jewel*In the last few minutes of the competition Emeraldain had found a giant form of the gem he was named after, when a support beam snapped, causing a cave in to trap several of the other competitors. The decision had been clear to Emeraldain as he dropped the emerald into the main quarry pit, shattering as it hit the hard ground, and flew to the rescue of the other ponies. His swift speed and righteous heart saved the lives of two ponies and 3 young foals that day.

    A year later he received a letter from the Ministry of the Guard wing in Manehatten, where his sister Nightingale was posted. It was a letter detailing the death and heroics of his sister who had died during a gang war protecting a filly who had been caught in the crossfire the slums, and an invitation to the funeral ceremony of both she and several other guardsmen who had given their lives on that same night. It was there that a grieving and angered Emeraldain saw the Wonderbolts flying for the ceremony that day, and where one of the Bolts gave a speech about living life to the fullest and to always live for what's right even when it was hard. These words inspired him to never go home to Quarrina but instead travel the world, trying to live his life in honor of his sister, and to help others like she would've done. In his pursuits he has seen the Gates of Canterlot, The City of Clouds known as Cloudsdale, and the still wild frontiers of Appleloosa.




Example RP segment:(prompt 1)
     I was hurrying to the train station in hopes to catch my train, after being delayed by the tantalizing smell of a fig and peach pie being sold at the corner outside the bustling inn I had taken refuge in from the thunderstorm the previous night, dreadful bustle that was, when I saw a gathering of ponies in the middle of the road. Slightly curious as to what was causing the commotion and feeling I had a few minutes, I pushed my way into the throng of ponies with the required "Excuse me" or "Pardon".


      In the ring of ponies I saw a sight that made me drop my train ticket without thought and stare. There was a young filly sobbing and screaming the question "Momma?! Momma where are you?!? at the top of her lungs, but what shocked me beyond belief was the fact that the 20 or so ponies around her were doing nothing to help, instead staring, whispering, and talking to each other about the scene in front of them. I began walking forward slowly as to not scare the filly even more while the commotion around us stopped as the ponies looked questioningly at the strange pegasus inching closer to the girl.

   When I reached her, she was still crying but was clearly watching me, after a brief glance around I asked her "What's wrong young filly? Where is your mother?" She answered through broken sobs, "I-I don't knoooow! We were- We were shopping for berries for dinner tonight an-and I lost her!" "How long ago do you think you last saw her, and where?" "A-about twenty minutes ago at Merri's Pies" I was relieved as she seemed to be calming down at least well enough to answer my questions, when I realized I had just been there enjoying my snack! "What's your name? I'm Emeraldain" "H-hi Emeraldain, my name is Sweet Corn." "Well Sweet Corn I think I may know where your mother is!" No sooner then I had replied she squealed, the sadness in her voice was quickly replaced with the excitement only a filly could have. "You do!? Where is she? Could you take me? Pretty pretty pleeeeeeaase!!!!" She was going to faint from lack of breath at this rate I thought jokingly, responding before that could happen, "Of course, of course! It would be my pleasure Sweet Cor-Ah just hold your hooves little lady, you'll pull my wing off if ya don't let go" she looked down embarrassed and let go quickly "Sorry Mr. Emeraldain", she said"I'm just so happy that I'm gunna see my mommy again" "Don't worry it's fine, here hop on," I told her as I lowered my back and moved my wings for her to be able to sit "I'll get us there faster then you can say Wonder Bolt!" and with that I quickly ran through the still talking ponies off towards Merri's Pies.

   Looking back it was moments like those that filled my heart with joy, the look and twinkle in Sweet Corn's eyes as we found her mother shouting with joy at the sight of her little filly safe and sound in front of Merri's as she repeatedly tried to pay me or offer to buy me a new ticket once I told her my tale of finding, resigning to give a simple thanks as I refused her offers. Sweet Corn gave me a quick hug before being led off by her mother, as I watched for a few moments. I then spread my wings and took flight, trying to reach my previous destination of Ponyville before it got dark.


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Quillon



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Join date : 2012-07-23
Age : 18
Location : White Treehollow

PostSubject: Re: Emeraldain    Tue Nov 13, 2012 5:29 pm

This looks interesting. My OC is a traveller Pegasus too, but I'm liking your OC so far. I'm just a regular user, here to welcome you and to say I'm looking forward to seeing you around!
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Emeraldain



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Location : Ponyville

PostSubject: Re: Emeraldain    Tue Nov 13, 2012 5:36 pm

Thanks a bunch! I'm new to RPing and am quite excited to join a mlp community! Thanks for the kind words also, since praise and criticism helps a bunch! Hopefully I'll see you Soon!
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Fireseeker



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Join date : 2012-07-28
Location : United Kingdom

PostSubject: Re: Emeraldain    Tue Nov 13, 2012 8:43 pm

Hi there,
Just a few things need to be tweaked before your character can be approved.

Firstly, your image cannot be viewed because it is listed as file from your computer. You need to upload the image to a website, such as DeviantArt, then insert the image via its url. Furthermore, you can create an image of your pony from stratch using the pony creator, then save and upload that to an image site. [LINK]

Secondly, your characters history can be expanded. Consider adding details about where he lived, his past, perhaps how he earned his cutie mark, and what exactly he aims to do in the future.

Also, on another note, try using more spacing during RP'ing. While your grammar is decent, separating text into shorter paragraphs is preferable to giant blocks of text.

Sort these things out and I see no reason not to approve you :)

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Emeraldain



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PostSubject: Re: Emeraldain    Tue Nov 13, 2012 10:40 pm

There, I believe I've fixed it. Sorry for the mistakes, this is the first time I've tried doing anything like this, but I'm quite excited for it. Thank you again for help and sorry for the lack of a cutie mark visual. Also I didn't know if my history was too long, but once I started I had trouble stopping and 10 mins later there it was.
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PostSubject: Re: Emeraldain    Wed Nov 14, 2012 6:56 am

No problem, it's a very good application. Description of the cutie mark is fine.

Happy to say you've been approved

Also, feel free to use the chat window, found at the bottom of the home page

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